Monday, 5 March 2012

Essential To Life, My Best Friend's Brain That Is

I was recently challenged to use water as an extended metaphor in a poem about my best friends brain. Since this poem was technically due today, I thought I would post it on my blog instead to receive feedback from my peers this way. I would love to read and give feedback to you on your poems, so I encourage all my creative writing peers to post their "my best friend's brain" poems.
(Let me know if you find out who my "best friend" is!) :)


Essential to life
My best friend’s brain that is
To me, it’s as transparent as could be
It leaks wisdom
That drenches the thirsty concrete of my home
With unconditional attention   
It’s filled with comforting words that rush
Swiftly down her flickering mouth
Splashing my frown with a drop of hope 
It overflows with sympathy
As she outspreads her hands to offer a
Refreshing embrace
It’s enrobed with laughter
As her lips crease aloft
Washing away my gloom
Pouring tiny dribs of clarity
Down the dry lanes
Of my polluted domain  
It’s not a commodity that can be
Trapped in a vain bottle
It’s a human right
For all the young and old
For every animal and plant
It’s a prudent resource
That nourishes
But is never nourished back –
Essential to life
My best friend’s brain that is
To me, it’s as transparent as could be.

2 comments:

  1. I really like this poem! My favourite line(s) are "It leaks wisdom / That drenches the thirsty concrete of my home."

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  2. Thanks Ms. Natalie! :) Did you figure out who my "best friend" is? Because I wanted that to be evident throughout the poem.

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